I liked the 2nd bit the best.
The first part was decent. I don't know, I just felt like you took the sheepish/playing dumb role too far, and it wasn't funny.
Telling everyone not too laugh kind of got tired, for the audience, I feel like.
The 2nd one was funny, though. You found a rhythm, and just started flowing man. That seemed to be you in your natural state, at ease n all.
And you had quotables! That's what makes comedy, for me. When you hear something, love it, laugh, and reference it later. Bc that means it struct a chord w you; you related
Your last bit seemed very rushed, and I think that was the nervousness the people in this thread observed.
Hope that helped. Just wanted to give you some honest feedback from somebody who attempts to study comedy
Keep on workin man, you can make it happen if you want
Oh! And respect for even getting up there. Most people wouldn't even
consider that.
