I'm a New Comedian- Help Me Out-Update-New Vid Page 1-Time Square Comedy

[zerogravity23]

 

[zerogravity23]

 

[GTA 809]

Bookmarked for later.

 

[ride2diedagreat]

I actually enjoyed it a lot man!! If you would slow down and not rush your deliveries, then it would be even better. Great jokes though bro! Post more vids when you start doing more shows. Keep it up homie.

 

[ride2diedagreat]

I actually enjoyed it a lot man!! If you would slow down and not rush your deliveries, then it would be even better. Great jokes though bro! Post more vids when you start doing more shows. Keep it up homie.

 

[GTA 809]

Bookmarked for later.

 

[dub 253]

Good job. Just work on the word whiskers. Too many "umm's".

Good ##@# tho.

 

[dub 253]

Good job. Just work on the word whiskers. Too many "umm's".

Good ##@# tho.

 

[jd214]

Originally Posted by DUB 253

Too many "umm's"

This, but

I lol'd

Pretty good stuff, Keep up the work fam.

 

[jd214]

Originally Posted by DUB 253

Too many "umm's"

This, but

I lol'd

Pretty good stuff, Keep up the work fam.

 

[papageorgeo510]

I think you were going a little too fast, let the jokes sink in a bit.

 

[papageorgeo510]

I think you were going a little too fast, let the jokes sink in a bit.

 

[feeninlikejodeci]

nice set, ill be checking for more of your stuff

 

[feeninlikejodeci]

nice set, ill be checking for more of your stuff

 

[darthska]

Nah, dude, funny stuff.

Just need to work on the delivery. Don't stand so stiff, move your hands more... talk like how you do when you're watching a game with your boys and you have a story to tell. Do you sit there all stiff, speaking all fast as you let 'em know how your date went? Nah.

But that just comes with being more relaxed.

You'll be alright. Props to you, man.

 

[darthska]

Nah, dude, funny stuff.

Just need to work on the delivery. Don't stand so stiff, move your hands more... talk like how you do when you're watching a game with your boys and you have a story to tell. Do you sit there all stiff, speaking all fast as you let 'em know how your date went? Nah.

But that just comes with being more relaxed.

You'll be alright. Props to you, man.

 

[memphisboi55]

Originally Posted by moundraised23

it wasnt bad....u picked it up in the last half......i chuckled a few times  

dope avy btw

Traitor.

 

[memphisboi55]

Originally Posted by moundraised23

it wasnt bad....u picked it up in the last half......i chuckled a few times  

dope avy btw

Traitor.

 

[memphisboi55]

Was pretty funny 

 

[memphisboi55]

Was pretty funny 

 

[OneNightDan]

Dude you are funny as hell!
Had me rollin'!

 " I ain't tryin' to $%@ $#@5 up 'cause I live rent free!" 

 

[OneNightDan]

Dude you are funny as hell!
Had me rollin'!

 " I ain't tryin' to $%@ $#@5 up 'cause I live rent free!" 

 

[wr]

good job op. keep it up

 

[wr]

good job op. keep it up

 

[thunderchunk69]

I think you're well on your way

just think most comedians work towards more concise, simpler anecdotes.
you had a bit extra that could have been shaved off, made it a bit tougher to follow.

props!