I'm a New Comedian- Help Me Out-Update-New Vid Page 1-Time Square Comedy

[feeninlikejodeci]

Originally Posted by ILL LEGAL OPERATION

Originally Posted by cbrooks3

i thought the funniest part was when you would tell a story and people would laugh and you get mad at 'em because "that %#** is serious, it is a part of my life. this isn't funny."

Yeah - I think you should say that with a little more "umph" like " 

 #+#$ y'all laughin' at?!" - kinda like Bernie Mac at the Apollo when he was cussin' at the audience ("I ain't scared of you mutha #+#$!!") or Chris Tucker in "Friday" ("Don't laugh - it ain't funny")...
...it's a cheap way to get laughs while you get the crowd into you and set the next joke up.

Your stage presence will get better over time, but you're off to a good start...

thats a interesting observation, never noticed that

 

[quincy powell]

You're funny. Slow down work on your timing.

 

[quincy powell]

You're funny. Slow down work on your timing.

 

[kickstart]

You picked it up after the 3-minute mark.

Your eyes were distracting though, they seemed closed most of the time, except towards the end.

Applauds for doing stand up and not bad.

 

[kickstart]

You picked it up after the 3-minute mark.

Your eyes were distracting though, they seemed closed most of the time, except towards the end.

Applauds for doing stand up and not bad.

 

[subywill]

Not bad! I liked it!

 

[subywill]

Not bad! I liked it!

 

[frostythepoptart]

great work. keep at it.

I didn't like the excessive "im not a #+@*$" didn't really have a place imo

and the whole this is my life don't laugh was funny the first two times but when you came back to it midway the 3rdd time i was kinda like

but overall I really enjoyed it.

 

[frostythepoptart]

great work. keep at it.

I didn't like the excessive "im not a #+@*$" didn't really have a place imo

and the whole this is my life don't laugh was funny the first two times but when you came back to it midway the 3rdd time i was kinda like

but overall I really enjoyed it.

 

[Deleted member 41978]

it was pretty good. Only thing though is you're saying "and um" too much, and slow it down a tiny bit... Let the audience digest whats going on and visualize it. Good work though my man

 

[Deleted member 41978]

it was pretty good. Only thing though is you're saying "and um" too much, and slow it down a tiny bit... Let the audience digest whats going on and visualize it. Good work though my man

 

[og_Rodney]

I really liked it, I think the bit about living with your girlfriend was the best.

One piece of advice I've heard comedians give is to write constantly. Wherever you are, always have a bit forming in your mind. Keep telling them jokes, man.

 

[og_Rodney]

I really liked it, I think the bit about living with your girlfriend was the best.

One piece of advice I've heard comedians give is to write constantly. Wherever you are, always have a bit forming in your mind. Keep telling them jokes, man.

 

[rareprecision23]

good work. never give up.

 

[rareprecision23]

good work. never give up.

 

[sneakerpimp325]

Thanks guys for the kind words. I truly appreciate it.

 

[sneakerpimp325]

Thanks guys for the kind words. I truly appreciate it.

 

[sherwin100s]

Originally Posted by GUNNA GET IT

"i just woke up at 4:30"

 

[sherwin100s]

Originally Posted by GUNNA GET IT

"i just woke up at 4:30"

 

[sneakerpimp325]

New Video up... On page 1

 

[sneakerpimp325]

New Video up... On page 1

 

[Sir San Diego]

Getting better. Keep working on your rhythm and the punches. Seems like you were nervous to get to the punch line a couple of times and stumbled into them.

They should come off clean and unexpected. My two cents.

 

[Sir San Diego]

Getting better. Keep working on your rhythm and the punches. Seems like you were nervous to get to the punch line a couple of times and stumbled into them.

They should come off clean and unexpected. My two cents.

 

[dabottom305]

I liked the videos.

 

[dabottom305]

I liked the videos.